Monday, May 14, 2012

Could someone pls correct this sentence for me for any potential commas and errors


Could someone pls correct this sentence for me for any potential commas and errors?
I want to write an objective in order to obtain an internship in Great Britain. So please see the sentence below. "Seeking an internship that I can connect with my current studies and be able to apply my previous experience to make a contribution while gaining valuable insights into the British work environment." or "Seeking an internship that I can connect with my current studies in order to gain valuable insights into the British work environment while being able to apply my knowledge and skills in order to make a contribution."
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I would do this: Seeking an internship that relates to my current studies and will provide valuable insight into the British work environment while utilizing my knowledge and skills in order to make a contribution. I am a U.S. citizen, and have no formal college english.. :) So have someone else check it too...